Shadow

My biggest critique is that you don't need the ellipses (...) after "when you were still" and "peeling to reveal" because the formatting implies that pause. That's the nice thing about poetry.

I also think that "a dark and lonesome shadow" could be changed to just "a lonesome shadow" because really, aren't all shadows dark? The fact that it's a shadow, a black two dimensional thing cast by a solid object, implies how dark it is. If you meant it was dark as in sinister or of ill intentions, that's completely different, and would change the interpretation of the poem entirely. If that is the case you should definitely say something along the lines of it being sinister.

But from the way it reads, I doubt that is the case. Over all I don't think much needs to be changed. Good work.