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March 23
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Parched, starving

for profound waters.

In the early morning

you touch my scars,

you rise above time,

you don't unplug me,

YOU are my sweetest downfall.

My first try at a title poem.  Definitely something I'd like to try again.  Have you ever written one?

I have to give credit to the artists responsible for these titles:…     DrippingWords…       marzenaabl…       mcgraczu…     Hermetic-Wings…     RohMah1…   Syrjusz… iNeedChemicalX

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Faves-Of-The-Week!!I'm sorry I'm so late with this; my day was a tad shaky. This week has been full of some of the most awesome submissions I have seen yet. Take the time to soak in every single one of these pieces! 

Subtlety can be both powerful and weak. This poem has managed to capture the 'dagger' in symbolism and euphemism; coming strong with an emphasis on the might of spoken word. The lines aren't identically synonymous, but that only brings out the beauty in this piece. There's a lot of hidden emotion roiling to the surface as the author describes an almost pristine mental landscape; with her words painting pictures that fade and emerge with each stanza. 

Oh my God. This poem is awesome. There's a lingering tantric motion in the boundlessness of mental state; teetering on the edge of awareness and fantasy. I love how this poem brings out the instinctual human desire for more when there oftentimes isn't. There's a sea

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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Student Writer
Pauper-Circumstance Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014
Excellent work with your first title poem! :D I have written a few, and they can be difficult at times, because it's hard to find titles that flow well, but you do a good job here of keeping a steady flow while being able to tell something to the reader. :)
prettyflour Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much!
Pauper-Circumstance Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014
Welcome! :D
mcgraczu Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you, that is very sweet of you. : )
OuroborosRagnarok Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Interesting. I like the idea, and it worked well.
prettyflour Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
ArcNovaXIII Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
nice tyle, good work
prettyflour Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
ArcNovaXIII Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
np, your really good at this dude. About the..i think 4th one i commented on! Oh, wish to read a new poem i made?…

here it is if you wish to! 

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