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frozen in winter

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the world has fallen silent
I've become violent and cold
watch your nightmare unfold
a human stranglehold engaged
mass casualties have raged
comfort in being caged and fed
are we better off dead
to choose living instead, survive
it's a hardship to thrive
thankful to be alive this time
we have mountains to climb
yearn to see the springtime again
Day 21- DFC 2015   :iconprojectdfc:   DFC Form Chart 2015 by kiwi-damnation


The Form: The Luc Bat .  It is a Vietnamese form featuring alternating six and eight syllable lines (Luc Bat means six-eight). 

It has a descending rhyme pattern with each rhyme occurring three times: First at the end of an 8 syllable line, then at the end of the next 6 syllable line and then as the sixth syllable of the next 8 syllable line. The end loops back to the beginning. There is no line limit to this form.

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