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First off, I feel you've done an overall lovely job with the alphabet form in this - I didn't notice the pattern the first time I read through the piece, and I believe this means that you managed to both stick to the scheme and not make it seem unnatural at the same time. Personally I've never tried it, but I can imagine it to be quite challenging, so good job! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/c/c…" width="20" height="20" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="60" title="Clap"/>

I really like the imagery in this, especially in the first stanza: "close to the heavens and yet I / didn't see any stars" is my favourite part of this poem. It gives off such a sense of hopelessness while at the same time conveying an 'almost there' feeling.

Now, I don't feel this needs a major overhaul or even anything remotely close to it, but there are some details which I personally feel could be changed to make it better. Feel free to use these suggestions as you see fit, please!

A personal pet peeve of mine is the use of the "..." within this. I don't appreciate it much in poetry and avoid using it myself, so this is entirely my personal standpoint, but I'd figure the use of hyphens would give the piece more tempo. Whenever three dots appear, I feel the poem suddenly stands still, since (to me) it gives off the impression that the narrator has run out of words to say.

In "his now unreachable, earthly hand" I feel the use of the word earthly is great, but there are synonyms of "unreachable" that would fit in much nicer beside it; I am particularly thinking of distant here, I just feel it would go better with the line: "his now distant, earthly hand".

That's all I have on this. Again, I love what you did with the form, it really turned out very nicely <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=" (Smile)"/>